Hot pizza

by , posted on June 24th, 2011 in Red Writing Hood




I left the bar and the boy with the turquoise eyes and wobbled down the sidewalk in search of a cab.

I had not had more than an occasional glass of wine since Justin died. And so three beers on an empty stomach made me wonder what happened to my feet.

I stopped and looked down, half-expecting my havaianas to be a few inches off the concrete, or possibly completely gone. But there they were, the bling politely winking at me.

There were no taxis in sight but there was a pizza by-the-slice place at the corner and I floated down there, the spicy scent of tomato sauce and oregano hitting me before I even opened the door. The windows were steamy and the place was busy, but not like it would be after midnight when the bars stopped serving food. I ordered two slices of pepperoni and a Coke and found a high table where I plopped down my plate and shoved half the slice into my mouth – which is when I lost half the skin on the roof of it.

I guzzled down some Coke and then I burped, not quite getting my hand in front of my face to block it. Which is exactly when the Windex-eyed bartender suddenly appeared in front of me.

“Bless you!” he said, smiling widely.

I should’ve been mortified. But I instead toasted him with my second slice of pizza.

“Saw you wander down here when I stepped out to get some air on my break. I was hoping I could get your number. I should’ve asked before you left.”

He looked expectantly at me.

“Sorry, ” I said after another swallow of Coke. “I’m married.”

This story is a work of fiction inspired by the prompt, “Write a 300-word flash fiction piece on the topic of life,” for The Red Dress Club. It is the continuation of the story of Cam: Part One, Part Two, Part Three and Part Four.

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46 Responses to “Hot pizza”

  1. The Drama Mama Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 2:16 am

    lost half the skin at the top of it…burped, not quite getting my hand in front of it..Windex eyed bartender…tomato sauce and oregano…I’m so there.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    i feel like i’ve been there, except for the Windex eyed bartender. But the pizza and burping? For sure!

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  2. Alison@Mama Wants This Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 3:10 am

    I actually said Ouch out loud when I read the line “lost half the skin of the roof of it”. I like that she burped and didn’t care :)
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    Cheryl Reply:

    I hate burning the roof of my mouth. HATE it.

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  3. MommyLisa Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 5:58 am

    Oh – she is not having a good day. I have a friend Jaci who has been having days like this occaisionally for a year.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    She hasn’t had a good year. But better times are ahead..

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  4. CDG Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 6:45 am

    ooof.

    Based on our conversation earlier, call me doubly impressed.

    The details in this are so crisp and vibrant. The Windex eyes are my favorite; unpected, perfect, and memorable.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    i just never know what will come out when i sit down and stare at the blank screen for an hour or seven. ;)

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  5. Nancy C Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 6:47 am

    Hee! I loved when she saluted him with the slice. That’s my favorite part.

    When you drink, it removes some of the social varnish. She’s being a more abrupt version of herself. And yet, those walls stay up.

    I wish I could articulate why, but the paragraph where she walks in and orders the pizza feels “heavier” than the rest.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    It’s the longest paragraph. I never use long paragraphs. It has stunned you. ;)

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  6. Lance Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 8:30 am

    If you were single you wouldn’t have burped…just saying.

    The Windex eyes were an excellent choice. I felt like I was one booth over, under a steamy window, drunkenly scarfing a slice checking out the burping girl.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    HA! She actually is single. Well, she’s widowed

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  7. Jen Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 8:35 am

    I love how you write.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Thanks, babe!

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  8. Ann Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 9:56 am

    Oh, I totally felt that pizza burn and almost throwing up from the pain–all the while Windex Eyes is staring at me.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Hey – thanks for visiting! Much appreciated!

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  9. Ratz Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 10:16 am

    Such a lovely selection of words Cheryl. I liked this piece.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Thank you, my friend!

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  10. Jennifer Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 10:34 am

    Though funny, the contemplation of her feet the burping, and I’ve been this woman, right down to the burned roof of mouth, it was also sad, because she’s so alone. Her final line about being married, really made me feel for her because she’s using that to isolate herself or she actually forgot for one second that she wasn’t anymore, and that’s even more sad. But I truly loved how blase she was about turning down Mr. Windex.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    I do not think Mr. Windex will go away easily ;) And yes, she’s confused that she’s actually attracted to someone. Basically, she’s a hot mess!

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  11. Kim Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 10:55 am

    I want more.
    More of her, more of her story, more of the Windex-eyed bartender.
    Pretty please?
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    Cheryl Reply:

    There will be more. I don’t even think I’ve come up for a name for him yet. Hmm.. Winn? HA!

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  12. naomi Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 11:43 am

    loved this part “made me wonder what happened to my feet.”

    yep — have been there for sure!

    (sharing TRDC at hhttp://haverecklessabandon.blogspot.com/)
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  13. Kristy Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 11:44 am

    You have her deliberate, simple, careless actions (from a little drink) down pat. Loved it!
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Thanks – she’s a bit of a mess for sure!

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  14. Lizz Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 12:09 pm

    Love this, especially because that pizza place hits so close to home… in my barhopping days, we had a place we went after closing, at 2am. We’d order slices, and they came out SO hot, we set a rule that you get the pizza, then smoke a cigarette to give it time to cool down. This rule really came in handy when you’ve been drinking and don’t pay attention to how hot your food is! LOL
    Love your words in this… the politely winking bling, the Windex-eyed guy? Fabulous!
    Lizz recently posted.."Last bite, Mommy?"

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    Cheryl Reply:

    That’s funny! There really isn’t much worse than burning off that layer of skin. Ugh!

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  15. Kir Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 12:43 pm

    every line was perfect, loved the “Windex eyed” , I’m a total sucker for BIG BROWN or BIG BLUE eyes. Sigh.

    and the end, “Sorry, I’m married” WOW..awesome ending.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Thanks! Windex will likely notice her lack of ring and start questioning her..

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  16. Caroline Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 2:18 pm

    This is short, sweet and to the point. I love the story. Especially when she burped in his face. Ah, gone are the inhibitions. Your story telling is really very crisp and clear! I enjoy reading it!!
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Thank you so much! And she feels she has nothing to lose, so she is definitely uninhibited!

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  17. julie moore Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 3:16 pm

    After reading this I was intrigued so went back and read all the rest of the story. I love Cam and feel so sorry for her. Grief is such a terrible thing. You have written a wonderful story with the truth of how grief effects most people.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    wow – thank you so much for going back and reading! I’m hoping to make Cam someone who is relatable and who we can root for.

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  18. Carrie Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 4:37 pm

    Nice to see she is getting on with her life…at least a little :)

    I loved the imagery of the pizza place: steamy windows, heavenly aromas. Made my mouth water!

    I don’t feel this is the best piece you’ve written though. It felt a little choppy. There are things you could possibly cut out to make it a bit tighter. This part for example: “the place was busy, but not like it would be after midnight when the bars stopped serving food” I don’t know if it helps the story any.

    So how did you enjoy trying the lesser word count?
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Word counts are never an issue. I had to come in at a certain length under incredibly tight deadlines (like, 10 minutes sometimes!) so I’m good with it. What else is nice about word counts is I will likely get around to reading a lot more!

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  19. Chasing Joy Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 7:11 pm

    Great read. As a single girl I wish something like that would happen to me :-)
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Try burping in public, maybe? ;)

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  20. angela Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 8:37 pm

    There’s so much I loved about this, but my favorite was Windex-eyed as a description. It’s so vivid, but I never, ever would have thought to describe eyes like that.

    And, oh, havaianas. I’m glad she was wearing walkable shoes ;)

    Cheryl, I don’t know how you do it every week, but you make me want to be IN your stories, even though I don’t ever actually want to be in Cam’s situation as a young widow. And I don’t want to burn my mouth on pizza. But as I’m reading, I somehow want to be there!
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    Cheryl Reply:

    Angela – this comment made my night. It really did. What a wonderful, wonderful compliment. Thank you. So much.

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  21. Renee Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 10:09 pm

    Now I want pizza.
    I loved the descriptions. Smelling the sauce before opening the door. And the windex blue eyes (very popular) are awesome.
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    Cheryl Reply:

    I so want pizza now too!!

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  22. Theresa Sonoda Says:

    June 24th, 2011 at 11:34 pm

    Loved it. A girl who knew what she wanted, went for it, no apologies and no regrets. It was, after all, only pizza. Great job! You can make anything interesting, my friend. Love your renderings.
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  23. Cheryl Says:

    June 25th, 2011 at 1:04 am

    Thank you, my friend! And you are so right: she was hungry and she wanted that pizza, dammit! ;)

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  24. Galit Breen Says:

    June 25th, 2011 at 1:20 am

    I love the Windex eyes, the burned roof of her mouth, the pizza toast- all concise, strong images.

    I also love the karate chop ending. Poor Cam.
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  25. Valerie Says:

    June 25th, 2011 at 9:43 am

    I’m loving the Windex eyes too-and the way she looks down at her feet. Once, loooong ago in college I remember that feeling and thinking that there was no way I could possibly be walking in my condition and just sitting down on the sidewalk. I’m glad those days are over!

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  26. Christine @ quasiagitato Says:

    June 25th, 2011 at 9:47 am

    That whole thing is just delicious! Her sort of floating and free…uninhibited…him enticed by that. Her really just out to satisfy the less complicated kind of hunger. And ‘windex-eyed?’ That’s just awesome.
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